Wednesday, December 11, 2013
Argument Rough Draft
As you listen to music in your car, while taking a shower, shopping, or when you are out to eat, have you ever thought that it could be beneficial? Studies have shown that music can help with memory, relaxation, and exercise. I work at a nursing home and these three points that music helps with is very important for residents, as some are really confused and in pain. At the nursing home that I work at, we have daily activities for the residents to attend if they would like. A big one is music. We have different people who come in and do a show for the residents. Some performers will sing, some will play the piano, others will do both. We also have kids from school come and perform or choirs will come to perform as well.
Studies have proved that music can help with Alzheimer and dementia patients. Music also helps with other memory factors such as depression and also reduces stress. Classical music is found to be one of the best types of music to enhance storage in one's memory. Increasing the release of hormones in the body is an effect of music, which helps with memory. Also, preparing for tests, studies have shown that music can help while studying. Working in a nursing home, I see a lot of Alzheimer's and dementia and music is a common activity that we offer weekly to the residents and it shows a difference, not only in their memory, but in their attitudes.
Relaxing is something we all strive for. Music can be relaxing in ways such as helping with pain, sleeping, and muscle tension. Researchers have stated that some music can help slow the progression of Parkinson's. Researchers also state that some types of music can produce dopamine and serotonin, which are imbalanced nuerochemicals that effect Parkinson's Disease. Music also has a positive effect on lowering blood pressure, improving respiration, reducing heart rate and improving cardiac output. Cancer patients have also been known to reduce pain and anxiety and improving their mood and quality of life by music therapy.
When it comes to a race, music can help accelerate your speed. Research has said that music can increase endurance by 15 percent. Up beat songs will increase or match your tempo of running strides which will also help someone to run longer. While listening to music during exercise, it can distract one from feeling the burn. This also results in weight loss and a more healthy life style.
Although music can be beneficial with memory, relaxation, and exercise, everyone has their own taste in genres. These different genres can effect a person in different ways and can effect each of these beneficial points differently. I strongly believe and I am convinced from researchers that music does help a person in many effective ways. Consider the studies and research that has been and is being done today.
Works Cited:
http://clearinghouse.missouriwestern.edu/manuscripts/230.php
http://www.drweil.com/drw/u/QAA401014/Music-to-Soothe-and-Relax.html
http://www.netdoctor.co.uk/healthy-living/wellbeing/health-benefits-of-music.htm
http://www.weightlossresources.co.uk/exercise/workouts/music-increase-exercise-endurance.htm
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Good job. I saw no errors. Very clear thesis and I agree compleatly. Works cited. Good statistics. I think you will get a really good grade on this!
ReplyDeleteYour topic is definitly interesting. I like to see more information to support your argument. I didn't see any quotes within your essay so you might want to do some more research. I would consider working on your conclusion a bit more and bring back your thesis into it. I see that you have a lot of information research but not enough first person view points.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting topic, I found your thesis to be very clear. I didn't see alot of research type quotes in your paper. I think if you find some of those it will help back up your paper.
ReplyDeleteI like this essay, you have great information to work with for your final.
ReplyDeleteYour thesis was clear and easy to find. I t you did have some really good information. I know this is a rough draft but you have a few problems. The first thing I see is that you did not cite any sources in your writing and your works cited needs a little work. I would try easybib.com for correct MLA format. The next big thing that I saw was the structure of your essay, it should probably be broken down into several paragraphs. Overall good content and good job just some tinkering needs to be done.
ReplyDeleteOk--So your topic should have several sources to help you. Music therapy is something that has been studied for some time. You need direct quotes from your research. Explain them. Show why they are important to your thesis. Imagine someone saying--WHAT?! You think music is going to heal my mother?! and gently but thoroughly explain why. Show why. Through research.
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